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Fran57
03-03-2007, 03:12 AM
Bonjour les frenchies, j'aurais besoin de votre aide... J'ai du faire un exercice pour mon cours d'anglais, tout est rédigé mais j'aurais voulu savoir si vous pourriez me corriger les fautes que j'aurais pu commettre. Merci d'avance ! ;)

The article comes from The Dailymail. It was published in 2003 and was written by Beezy Marsh, a medical reporter.
The author says that mobile phones are helping teenage girls stop smoking. He thinks that having a mobile phone satisfies the same needs as cigarettes. He uses figures to prove it: the Governement statistics say that smoking among 15 years olds fell from 30 to 23 percent between 1996 and 1999. At the same time a Mori poll showed that mobile ownership among 15 to 17 years olds rose to 70 percent in August 2003. According to experts the two figures are linked.
Marsh also use quotations from professors or doctors to give more weight to his argument and to convince people that his article tell the truth.
Concerning the pictures, on the first one we see two teenage girls turning on their cigarettes together. It's a part of the "peer group bonding" the author was talking about in the text. And the second picture is a publicity for a mobile phone with a huge "FREE" written in bold letters. Maybe they want to show that the mobile is free whereas the cigarettes cost a lot: they give another reason to support the principal argument of the author. I don't think it's betraying the legitimacy of the article.
I suppose that, with this article, the author want to convince young girls to stop smoking. I think that, even if it's not written in the text it's implied.

midnightdoggydiva
04-14-2007, 02:07 PM
The article comes from The Dailymail. It was published in 2003 and was written by Beezy Marsh, a medical reporter.
The author says that mobile phones are helping teenage girls stop smoking. He thinks that having a mobile phone satisfies the same needs as cigarettes. He uses figures to prove it: the Governement statistics say that smoking among 15 years olds fell from 30 to 23 percent between 1996 and 1999. At the same time a Mori poll showed that mobile ownership among 15 to 17 years olds rose to 70 percent in August 2003. According to experts the two figures are linked.
Marsh also use quotations from professors or doctors to give more weight to his argument and to convince people that his article tells the truth.
Concerning the pictures, on the first one we see two teenage girls turning on their cigarettes together. It's a part of the "peer group bonding" the author was talking about in the text. And the second picture is a publicity for a mobile phone with a huge "FREE" written in bold letters. Maybe they want to show that the mobile is free whereas the cigarettes cost a lot: they give another reason to support the principal argument of the author. I don't think it's betraying the legitimacy of the article.
I suppose that, with this article, the author wants to convince young girls to stop smoking. I think that, even if it's not written in the text it's implied.

I was being really petty with the 's', but the 's' is really important for those two sentances. Your answer seems really good hardly any mistakes. Hope it goes well!

Fran57
04-14-2007, 02:32 PM
Thanks... i needed it one month ago for the oral but thanks for answering ! I will correct the wrong things and use it in my other english test ! :kiss: